"There not much we can do for it." Jesse said, turning to the doctor. The slowing beep of a monitor signaling her heart stopping, "We can’t have another one die, if this one doesn’t survive they’ll shut down the entire project." He stated, placing his hand on the outside of the tank, sighing. "We can’t afford to mess up." Turning around, he started out the door but stopped, turning his head slightly to the side, hands behind his back "Don’t screw this one up, Jesse." He ordered, leaving the room. _______________________________________________________________________________
I felt my heart slowing, my life draining. I started to panic, I got air, supplements, everything I needed to survive. Was it the injections they put into me? I started to find hard to breathe, my eyes opened into slits, but I was surrounded by water, everything blurry. I tried to call for help, but nothing but nonsense came from my mouth, I started to see white. I was getting dizzy. A scream tore through me, my heart beat dangerously slow, I was confused. Someone help me! I kept screaming and crying, trying to get someone to help me, but my cries got quieter and quieter as I got dizzier and dizzier. Maybe I should go back to sleep, my eyes shutting, my breathing slowed, and everything went black.
I woke up, I think, everything felt so strange, so quiet, no sound at all. I was in a long hall, I saw a door at the end.
Curiosity got the best of me, and I ran towards the door. The closer I got, the harder it became to move. I continued -despite how hard it came to move-, until I was on my knees in front of the door. My breathing ragged, no heart beat, I grabbed the handle, I couldn’t breath. I twisted the handle, about to wrench the door open, then I realized I was walking towards my death, I didn’t want to die, but I was so tired, my chest was hurting, and I wanted to open the door. But something flickered inside of me, determination. I let go of the knob, my breath returning. I turned myself around, and dragged myself to the other end of the hall, each step getting easier, my heart beat starting. . I felt something thump against my chest, my heart, was it beating again? Did I actually get my heart to start again?
"Doctor! Her heart rate, it’s rising!" I heard, my eyes opening, but shutting when water water greeted them. A faraway muffled voice sounded, I didn’t understand anything they were saying, all of it was gibberish. I didn’t feel dizzy anymore, but I was still tired. I felt the water lower from the tank, and I fell into a troubled sleep.
The next sixteen years after that, I wish I had gone through that door.
End of chapter one:
Okay, the story is about a group of children who were born in tanks. Their super genius’s, and are incredibly powerful. She is actually the most powerful of all the other test subjects, seeing as she in this chapter she is actually an infant whose heart was stopping from and overdose of a drug that was supposed to improve her reflexes, the door is the door to death obviously, and she fights against it and lives, anyway blah blah blah, the next sixteen years part is because of the intense training (physical, and psychological), some more failed "Experiments"(which are her siblings), and cause she and her brothers and sisters are used as weapons of war.
P.S.
The story takes about a hundred or so years in the future.
Also, tell me if it sucks or if I should change it, cause I don’t know if it I like it or not, thanks.
She’s twisted into believing what they do is right, that she has to help serve her country, but over the story she finds these rebels…
Okay lemme explain, the government wants to take control of the world, like a new world order. One big system, one currency, one religion, and they succeed, they control the world. But there are almost no rights to the people, so if your not part of the government, or something big, you don’t matter at all. The people are just a herd a cattle. But a group of people are fed up with this, they start a secret revolution that grows big. The baby in this story is named Chaos, and all though she was trained, or brainwashed as some might say, to believe what the government is the right thing to do, she has a voice in the back of head silently telling her these things are wrong, especially when she meets a boy within the revolt, bringing out feelings she never new she could feel. So Chaos is battling within herself who her loyalty belongs to.
Also I edited it a bit, but you guys probably won’t read it..
"There not much we can do for it." Jesse said, turning to the doctor. The slowing beep of a monitor signaling her heart slowing, "We can’t have another one ruined, if this one doesn’t survive they’ll shut down the entire project." He stated, placing his hand on the outside of the tank, sighing. "We can’t afford to mess up." Turning around, he started out the door but stopped, turning his head slightly to the side, hands behind his back "Don’t screw this one up, Jesse." He ordered, leaving the room. _______________________________________________________________________________
I felt my heart slowing, my life draining. I started to panic, I got air, supplements, everything I needed to survive. Was it the injections they put into me? I started to find hard to breathe, my eyes opened into slits, but I was surrounded by water, everything was too blurry. I tried to call for help, but nothing but nonsense came from my mouth, I